Hello, my name is Su Bin and I'm now in the GLPS camp class 14. I will now introduce myself. I have four people in my family, like listening to K-POP, and I like rabbits and dogs.
First, I have four people in my family. My father, my mother, me, and my brother. My mother is a very nice person, and she cooks well. My father is an oriental doctor, and I like him because he listens to me and understands me well. My brother is both very funny and annoying. He wants to be a doctor when he grows up.
Also, I like listening to K-POP in my free time. I like listening to K-POP because hearing my favorite singer's songs calms me down. I especially like to hear the music of the boy band Big Bang because I like the singers in the group, and they have calming or hopeful songs.
Lastly, I like dogs and rabbits. I like dogs and rabbits because they are very cute and I used to keep a dog that was really cute, but the dog died because it missed its mom. So I really want to keep a cute dog when I'm grown up. I like rabbits because they are cute and easy to handle if you are careful.
In conclusion, I'm a 5th grade girl that has four people in my family, like K-POP, and like dogs and rabbits. I hope you had a good time reading this.
Hi Lucia! I'm your Writing TA. I like how you inserted a video in your essay. It seems that you love K-Pop also and especially Bigbang I guess. On the other hand, there were some minor mistakes such as "when I grow up" and "a 5th grade girl who has". Otherwise, it was a good essay. :)
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